This is a place where I can empty my thoughts onto a page.
Thursday, December 2, 2010
Crumble
I have lost myself
I don't feel whole
A crumbling statue
Of screaming stone
I wish to live
I hope to die
Anything would be better
Than this miserable fate
Just a few comments from me. First is that I'm pretty sure you misused the word Then, it should be Than. THe other comment is that this poem as a good example of imagery in it. "A crumbling statue of screaming stone" pops out to me and gives me a mental picture of what that would look like.
Just a few comments from me. First is that I'm pretty sure you misused the word Then, it should be Than. THe other comment is that this poem as a good example of imagery in it. "A crumbling statue of screaming stone" pops out to me and gives me a mental picture of what that would look like.
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